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When Good Characters Go Bad

Hey hey, Flobo here!

Today I want to talk to you about your characters. There are your protagonists (heroes) and there are your antagonists (villains). Most times these characters are on parallel trajectories, that is until they cross paths and all. But what about that character who was at once pegged a villain but saw the error of their ways? Or, perhaps even more interesting, what about those characters who slid into a darkness that they never recovered from?

There’s something magnetic about the fall of a good man/woman/character. In fact, most classical “tragedies” follow this formula. Imagine having someone who was at one time at peace with themselves slip into a situation that drags them down like quicksand. The stuff is legendary.

I’m going to catch flak for this, but I was never that big into Shakespeare. Don’t worry, I’ll make sure to never become an English teacher in order to spread that sort of blasphemy around. There was no denying his talent, but I appreciated Shakespeare’s work like how you would appreciate an oil painting in a museum. It was a joy to behold, but it was something that never really hit home for me. When I was tenth grade, the English class I was in tackled “Othello” and things began to change a bit. There was still loads of things that sailed over this brute’s head, but the downward spiral the character Othello went through, spawn from the initial thought of his wife’s infidelity, was something that still resonates with me.

What about in the Green Lantern arc “Emerald Twilight” where Hal Jordan (eventually retconned to be) possessed by the fear entity Parallax, goes on a killing spree, killing hundreds of other Corpsmen while in a blind rage? A desperate attempted to resurrect his home city (which had been leveled by Mongul and Cyborg Superman) was the tipping point for his path to darkness from hero to villain.

Or what about the music video for Cee-Lo Green’s “Forget You” where I nice guy was spurned by a lady he desired only for his character (in the video) to turn into a womanizing “Lady Killer”?

The video can relate to relationships in general. Friends of mine, male and female, have turned into “ladykillers/maneaters” based on being burned by the ones they loved.

Most of the time, the hero’s slip into the dark side could have been prevented. “If only Character B told our hero the truth”. Or, “If only Character C didn’t jump to conclusions and blamed the hero unjustly”. That’s the crux of the whole transformation:

Our hero gets hurt, and vows to never to get hurt again

As a writer, your character’s back story is one of the most important aspects of your work. Every character has flaws, and are all in some ways “damaged goods”. This, as crazy as it seems, makes him/her more “relatable” to your readers as I’m sure you already know this. While in the story of “Othello”, the character’s descent was the plot, I urge you for your own works to craft “smaller descents” for your characters. Maybe falling from the social totem pole in high school before the events of a story can explain why your hero isn’t trusting of people as an adult for example. I’m sure this would make your character more dynamic.

And dynamic stories sell. Or so I’ve heard.

–Flobo

Hey, Flobo here!

I know you are all ready to stuff your face for the holiday season. But before you do, spend some time with little ‘ol me while I talk about inspirations and all that jazz.

I’m sure by now you know about my almost unconditional love for my favorite superhero, but let me talk to you about my LEAST FAVORITE superhero in Gotham City’s Batman.

Oh, just look at him! Pompous jerk.

Batman has one of the most vocal fan-bases in all of comics. He’s considered one of the smartest minds in the DC Universe (his comic publisher’s home) and people will discuss the time(s) ol’ Bats smacked around (and defeated) Superman  in battle ad nauseam. Not bad for the billionaire who keeps kryptonite in his utility belt.

But you see, Batman (and his mild-mannered alter-ego Bruce Wayne) doesn’t really have any super powers so the term “superhero” is a misnomer. Fans would argue he has “genius level intellect”, but that hasn’t been confirmed in the pages of the comics. (For my geeky opinion, I consider Lex Luthor, a pre-relaunch Oracle, and Mr. Terrific all smarter than the Caped Crusader but that’s another post for another time. I do peg him as the best detective, even though I have a soft spot for Elongated Man….and Detective Chimp.)

My hate for the character doesn’t end there. I’m sure you’ve heard of the origin story: When Bruce Wayne was a kid he witnessed his parents being murdered right in front of his eyes. Taking that, he vows to rid the Gotham City of crime as The Batman, a symbol of fear. There’s a lot of things wrong with this. Besides the fact the character was inspired by/taken from Zorro, and that multi-billionaire corporate big wigs have no right (or time) to be vigilantes, to this writer it seems tragic that Bruce Wayne is pining for vengeance thirty or forty years after the original horrific event. That doesn’t seem like somebody who’s healed from the traumatic stress at all, and it definitely doesn’t seem like someone who should be given free reign to “protect” a city. Many writers from the comics know this, so they try to keep putting him through the wringer so the Batman character can be justified. (Jason Todd, anyone?)

Okay, so I bashed the guy enough. What could I possibly learn from a character I personally do not care for. Well, the writing of course!

 

You see, there’s no denying that some of the brightest minds in comics, television, and film gave our friend Bats some of the greatest stories in modern history. Sure, if I sat you down on the corner and talked about a guy who walked around town in a overgrown Bat-suit doing  things only the police should be involved with, you would laugh at me. However, everyone “believed” in the character in the film “The Dark Knight”. The  90s “Batman: The Animated Series” cartoon was one of the greatest of all time, and I’m sure that the “Knightfall” comic book story arc would be taught as literature in some English class of the future.

What I learned most from Batman is this: Sometimes if the story is good enough, the audience would look past the inherent flaws in that character. This is not to say to create weak characters from the start, but if the audience is sympathetic to the character’s plight–well, as sympathetic an audience can be to a multi-billionaire that employs underage children to be his crime-fighting partner(s)–and if the story is strong, they will most likely ride with you. People don’t cling to the fact a man in his 30s more or less lives in solitude save for a couple of people, they grasp on the notion that a young kid decided to fight back against the blight of his neighborhood.

What if a roach crawled in his house first?

“The Dark Knight” made a BILLION dollars at the box office, and Batman is one of DC’s most popular characters overall alongside Superman and Wonder Woman so of course this is just one man’s opinion. I will say, that I learned something from my least favorite comic book hero: It isn’t the beginnings that make you a hero, as much as it is your journey.

Now if you’re asking who’s my favorite billionaire smart guy who fights crime? Iron Man. Easy.

 

–Flobo

 

Why This Blog Exists

Hey everybody Flobo here!

As you may have figured out, this version of my website Flobito.com, has been live for a couple of weeks now. As I plan on filling these new digs with cool content that talks about writing, filmmaking, and pop culture, I hope you stick around and watch how this site grows in time.Mass Transit

A little bit of a primer: I’ve been blogging for about ten years now. In fact, you can check out my LiveJournal by clicking the link at this top of the page or  HERE . In 2009, I decided to launch Flobito.com (named after one of my half-dozen nicknames) as a place where I can have one online platform to combine and display my literary works, short films, personal appearances, and Youtube videos. While the original site was OK, their web-shell was very limiting in what I wanted to do. (Sometimes lines of code would just be mysteriously ignored by the client, don’t get me started). So I packed my bags and moved over here.

Now, I can list my video projects, writing samples, and news and information with ease. For the foreseeable future, my personal blog (about my day to day stuff) is going to stay on the LiveJournal site (for legacy’s sake). However, everything else, including updates on my new writing projects, discussions about the craft, movie and book/ebook reviews, interviews and their ilk will be right here on Flobito.com

Being a writer (and running two blogs) will be a bit of a challenge content-wise, but I’m committed to making it work.

In the meantime, if you are liking what you are seeing, tell a friend. Sure, I hope one day they you guys would eventually purchase a book written by yours truly, but sometimes it’s equally if not more important  to know that people are reading SOMETHING you wrote, regardless of the type of work.

“Like a dog without a bone or an actor out alone, riders on the storm.” -The Doors

-Flobo

Ironheart

“Ironheart” was a superhero story that I came up with four years ago. It’s embarrassing to read now, but at the time it was a pretty nice romp through the genre made popular by comic books and movies. It was a learning experience and it holds a special place in my heart because I developed the story when I studied abroad in Costa Rica, far away from familiar surroundings. I think it fueled my passion for writing as well as my desire to travel the world to collect new experiences. You see, not to be an Ugly American or anything, but after a day of speaking a foreign language, there was nothing more than I wanted to do than to stay home and play around with words in English.

 

Just to repeat, this short is over five years old so, cut me some slack…lol

Ironheart (Part I)

Hi, my name is Joe. I’m 6’2”, I like video games and…that won’t work. Okay, uh I am Joe Saxon and I have green eyes and like to write…no, no that’s way too lame. Let me start this off right. My name is Joe Saxon and I a superhero.

In fact, I really hate that term: Superhero. Can you blame me? What is the first thing you think about when someone says the word superhero? If you are like most, it’s probably an image of a musclehead flying around town in a cape. Let me tell you something, I don’t own a cape, and flab is the new muscle.
Where do I get off calling myself a superhero then? It is somewhat of a large claim. Before I get to that, let’s air out some of the prejudices you probably have of me. No, I am not making this up. No, I don’t collect comic books, and (hell) no, am I high when I write this. In fairness, that last one would be the hardest one to believe.

The first twenty years of my life were pretty normal. Well not normal completely, but I didn’t have powers. Hindsight is 20/20 and I wished I had those powers in High School. In any event, I got through my awkward phrase and attended college in New York City: The capital of the world. I began to adjust to the whole college life thing. Which was cool, seeing if I DIDN’T fit in, I could always find refuge in my parents house in New Jersey. It never came to that because frankly after the age of 18, who wants to live with their parents?

My first two years of college were great. Besides dealing with the food poisoning I got from the cafeteria food on a number of occasions, and my mountain of a student loan debt, I was on easy street. I was happy. I had great friends. I had great grades, and I had the girl. Oh man, did I ever. Her name was Karen and she had eyes of amber. I didn’t think it was possible, but she flashed fire with every blink.

I am not sure how it is at other schools, but my school was the last stop for the ladies. A lot of them had the old maid mentality. I am sure you know what I am talking about. They have the whole “If I don’t find a husband in college, I am worthless” attitude. I hear it is more common in the Midwest. Karen and I got close to that. We dated for two years and during that time we talked about our future our jobs and our kids. Kids?! I didn’t have the heart to tell her that children were the bane of my existence. Much like she didn’t have the heart to tell me she was cheating on me. Poor Karen, she had no clue what she gave up for a quick thrill.

Or at least, that was what I kept telling myself as I sat on my couch in my dorm room and watched re-runs on television. I was a wreck. I’ll put it like this: If the girl of your dreams walks out of them, what are you left to dream of?

My roommate Sal saw the condition I was in. He had noticed I hadn’t budged from the couch in four days. So much time had passed, I started to wear a little groove in the cushions with my side. He told me:
“Dude. You have to stop living like this.”
I am not sure if that was before or after he told me to take a shower. Hey, when I say four days, I meant four days.
“Come on”, he said. “We’re going out”.
“Is Karen going to be there?” I asked him. Man, I was a chump.
“Nope. Guys’ night out. Let’s go.”
To make a short story even shorter, Sal and I ended up going to a dinner show of a hypnotist. Donned in full suit and cloak, the guy was a total screwball. We got there a little late, but I got to see him make a small Asian woman believe she was part of Riverdance.
“What are we doing here?” I asked Sal.
“We are going to enjoy ourselves. Relax it won’t hurt.”
“But I have a paper due tomorrow, and I haven’t even started”
“You have a paper that wouldn’t have started regardless if you were with me or not. You’ll end up doing it later.”
Saw right through my lies. I wanted to be in my makeshift bed a lot more than I wanted to be at a dinner show. On the couch I could watch all that cable television could offer. I would sit there thinking about Karen. I could imagine her eyes or her smile. I wonder what she was up to and…
“You’re Up”, said Sal.
“Huh?”
“You heard me. You’re up.”
“Up for what?”
The PA system blared:
“Don’t be shy son. Experience the magic and wonder of the Amazing Ironheart. Relax young one, I do not bite.”
I’m not really sure why I went up there. I could have out right refused and he would have chosen some other schlub, but I got my sorry behind up there and sat in the sole wooden stool on stage. The man in the cloak, turned and asked me:
“Is this your first time being hypnotized?” he asked.
“Well yeah, providing this junk is real.”
“Oh, just you wait”, he said with a smile.

He took out a locket and did the whole “You are getting sleepy” bit. I didn’t buy it. After all, this guy was getting paid either way, he didn’t have to hypnotize anybody. He could totally fake it and still collect his cash at the door. On second thought, that would be a pretty swank way to live. Traveling the country, and seeing new people. That would be nice. Just me, Karen, and…

“Let’s give him a round of applause”, he said.
The crowd erupted into a frenzy. Some even gave a standing ovation. I got up out of my chair and stood there bewildered. What were they cheering for? I didn’t do anything. This guy in the cape didn’t do anything either. I stumbled back to my seat being blinded by the white hot stage lights. When I got back to my seat a few moments later, I was met with a huge smile on the face of Sal. He turned to me and said:
“Dude, that was awesome!”
I doubt me sitting on a wooden chair would warrant that kind of a response.
“What did I do?”
Don’t you remember?” Sal asked.
Blank stare.

“Well, after he put you under, he had you do some stupid stuff like jump up and down on foot – things like that. But then he told you to imagine if you could fly and to run and jump off the stage.”
“I don’t feel hurt,” I said.
“That’s just it. You ran, jumped, and actually flew around the room like you were wearing a jetpack. You have to tell me bro, where you in on it? Did you have like wires on or something?”
“No,” I said. “Not that I don’t remember.”

A very large man in a suit and a jazzy white tie stepped to my table. He looked at me, smiled and left a business card on my side of the table.
“Mr. Ironheart would like to see you after the show,” said the man in a voice only a smoker’s mother could love.

He walked away as coolly as he arrived. After he was out of my sight, I read the card:
KENNETH IRONS, PSYCHOANALYST
Psycho-what? What did this guy want with me? Was I going to join his act or something? I wonder what Karen would think of me if I became famous. She would regret the day she left me by the wayside. I decided to take the guy up on his offer and waited outside his dressing room after the show, leaving Sal to his own devices. I hear the business of show is pretty decent, and I can’t say no to potential cash.

“Do you know who I am,” was the first thing out the guy’s mouth. I’ve never seen a hypnotist be so full of himself. Then again, how many hypnotists have I actually seen? Was this some sort of quiz? Was he going to be a jerk to me until I answered his riddle of a question? I knew who he was. A glorified circus performer with an arrogant attitude but I wasn’t going to say that. Why risk my chances of being kicked out of the business of show before it even got going? I’m confused but I’m not stupid.
“A hypnotist?” I asked.
“Yes that is also true. But more importantly, I study the human mind. Do you know why I sent for you?”
Here is my chance. Get me out of the world of term papers and lab partners. Make me rich you crazy man.
“You want to offer me a spot in your show,” I said with conviction.
“Oh God no,” he laughed.
Well, there goes my chance at fame.
“Why on Earth would I do that? Listen…”
“Joe”, I said with just a hint of disappointment.
“Joe,” he repeated. “Do you remember what you did tonight?”
“Not really. But my roommate says something about me flying”
“Son, do you know what hypnotism is?”
Man I hate when people did this. Here is this hypno-psycho-analyst-tist. Someone who’s apparently been this sort of thing for years, is asking me what his profession is. No possible answer under the sun is going to be good enough.
“No, but I have a feeling you are going to tell me.”
So there I was, in the dressing room of a guy I didn’t know some days prior. He apparently has no need for me in his show, so why waste his time and mine with an explanation of something that I particularly didn’t care about.
“Son, hypnotism isn’t a science, but an art. It is all about control.” He continued, “Control of the mind, control of the body, control of the spirit.”
“Is this about tonight’s show?” I asked.
“Ooh. You are a smart one,” he replied.
For just a second, I wondered why exactly I was there. This fool is taking shots at me like we were friends and if he called me “son” one more time I swear we are going to fight.
The man turned around and faced a television that was mounted in the upper left hand corner of the room. With a press of a remote, the TV showed the performance that was on the stage some forty five minutes prior. There’s that Asian woman again. The picture had become blurry as he fast-forwarded the tape until my sorry behind was on front and center.
“Ooh. This is my favorite part,” the man said. Spoken like a true carnie would.
The video had me, in my entire camera-adding-ten-pounds glory, levitating to the ceiling. As Irons shouted out commands, I followed moving about the room as if I did in fact have wings. Sal wasn’t lying to me. I wondered which one was more surprising.
“That’s what I call stealing the show,” he said with a grin.
Don’t get me wrong, seeing yourself float is a surreal experience. You keep thinking it is some made for TV movie. But I was growing impatient. So let’s say it wasn’t a sight gag, what does it really have to do with me? I understand these guys want you to buy the video and all, but I think he was going too far as a salesperson.
“Okay, I got wings, what’s it to you?” I said.
The man smiled once again. “You see,” he began. “As I was saying before, hypnotism is all about control. But no hypnotist in the world can make you do something your mind doesn’t want to do on a subconscious level. The inner workings of the whole thing can boggle the mind.”
“What are you getting at?” I said. I was getting cranky. Maybe Karen would have stayed with me if I showed more of this side of me.
“Son”, There was that word again. “What you saw wasn’t a trick. For some reason you have the power to fly.”
He got another world class blank stare from me.
“I understand if you do not want to believe me. Heck, I do not think I would believe me either, but it is true.” Irons dug into his pocket. “Here is my address. If you wish, I could help you bring that part of your mind to total consciousness.
“And If I decide not to?”
“Hey, no harm, no foul.”
I got in well after midnight. My room was exactly the way I left it. Man, I am a pig. All the lights were on, so that must mean…
“Yo, where have you been? I waited outside the dinner theater for over an hour.” It was Sal. More like an annoyed slightly tired Sal with nothing on but his boxers. “I know where you went, but what took so long? What did he say?”
“He said that I have quote, The Power Of Flight unquote, and he wants to meet me tomorrow.”
“For what?” asked Sal.
“To…I am not really sure,” I said. My guess is he wants to see if I can do it all the time or something.”
“Are you going to do it?” He asked. I didn’t blame him, it was a fair question.
“Well,” I said. “I don’t have anything else to do.”
The next day, I arrived at Irons’ house. It wasn’t the huge brick mansion with the wrought-iron gates, excuse the pun. The house was fairly modern. You might consider it impressive judging by the fact he lived alone. Guys like him always did. You know the types, the one that can tell you the meaning of life on a whim, but didn’t know how to ask a woman out for drinks. I followed the instructions he gave me the night before and rang the doorbell to the adjacent basement.
“Who is it?” a voice called out from the electronic speaker.
“It’s Joe. You met me last night”
Silence.
“You know,” I said. “The guy who could…”
The door opened with a buzz.
“Come in, come in,” the voice called out. “We have much work to do.”
The word we. It implies cooperation; working together to achieve a goal. Well, the work “we” had to do was already done. You see in the dank basement of the old man laid a steel table. On that table laid books, journals, magazines, diagrams, dioramas, and charts all about the human brain. If I didn’t know it then, I knew it now. I was a test subject. Maybe Karen was right in leaving me. Maybe this was going to be the highlight of my life. I was going to be a guinea pig; trying to replicate something that was caught on grainy video that may well be an illusion to begin with.
Irons looked tired, as if he hadn’t slept at all the night before. His eyes were bloodshot. He positioned himself so that the table would be between us.
“In the short time he have been apart,” he started, “I have done extensive research, most of which came from my personal library. What you are looking at is nearly three dozen theories that explain what happened last night from the comical to the most definite.”
Maybe being a guinea pig isn’t such a bad deal after all.
“Definite?” I asked. “What’s your best guess?”
“Well, what do you know about PK?”
PK? Was that some kind of dog or a brand of cologne? Rather than guessing and risking yet another shot to my ego, I opted to take the easy way out. A simple headshake got the point across.
“Listen closely,” he started “It is very easy to get lost. PK stands for psycho kinesis. It is more or less the natural progression of the theory of telekinesis. Previous tests have found out that the abilities are nothing more than fiction. However, after reviewing last night showing, I feel you are a living, breathing anomaly in the regard that you have telekinetic powers.
“Ok,” I said. “I have these PK things. Great. That is all well and good but that doesn’t explain the angel act last night.”
“That’s where you’re wrong,” he replied. “You can move things with solely your mind. Sure you can bend spoons but I am thinking big. Last night, you took flight because with only your gray matter, you moved your own body as if it were second nature.”
“Assuming all that stuff was true,” I said. “How come I can’t fly now?”
I tried to launch myself into the air. A small part of me wanted to believe I was just a little different than the average person. But there was not a repeat performance. My feet were on the floor as if they had roots.
“Potential,” Irons bellowed. “Just because you have the ability to do something, doesn’t me it is easy. It is going to take time and practice. I can help. There is no telling how deep this thing goes,” he said.
“Does this mean you are going to have me under permanent hypnosis? Because to me, it’s the only way you get the show,” I said.
“Yes,” he said matter of factly. “I mean, maybe at first. Repeated use of the untapped part of the brain could awaken it somehow. Over time, you wouldn’t have to even give it a second thought. Joe, this is a grand opportunity if I ever saw one.”
“Don’t take this the wrong way,” I said. “I think you are a swell guy—I really do. But if you don’t’ want me in your show, what is all of this to you?”
“Consider this a grand experiment. That’s all. Just say the word, and your life will change forever.”
Something still was telling me to not trust this guy. Chalk it to my cynical nature. Although no one else on the planet was offering me anything half as interesting
“What the hey. I’m in”
The days that followed were a whirlwind. I spent my days in class, and my nights recovering from the afternoon training sessions with Irons. On top of that, I had to find a place to put sleep and meals somewhere in the day too. He put me through the ringer. There were drills after drills after drills. At first, he put me under full hypnosis. As time went on, I was less and less “under the influence” and started moving my attention towards objects.
I couldn’t forget my first subject: A spoon. A simple, metal, stereotypical spoon. I followed the man’s directions in focusing all of my will into bending the spoon. All I got out of that was the biggest headache of my life. I remember sitting in my chair holding my head in my hands at the temples. I didn’t know it then, but it got a lot easier.
I began to bend spoons with ease. The splitting headaches got a lot less painful. Naturally, I moved up the food chain sort to speak. It went from bending and moving silverware to tossing full television sets like they were toys. Gradually, I started to look forward to training. At first a chore, it was my leisure time. All I had to do was concentrate. Not on grades, not on keeping up appearances, and definitely not on her.
That semester came and went and I found myself in the middle of summer vacation. Sal and I moved out the dorms and found an apartment across the bridge in Brooklyn. Yeah, the commute would be longer, but I was happy I was living on this side of the East River.
For Sal, living with me was a no-brainer. Though we made a promise not to tell anyone about my abilities, Sal loved the idea that he could use them to win bar bets. You would have to see the faces of the guys who lost 20 bucks apiece because they didn’t think a bowl of nuts could float through the air. I didn’t feel bad one bit, it paid the bills.
That summer was especially hot in New York. We were in the midst of one of the longest heat waves in history. Eleven days, all without rain. The mayor put in the obligatory “Don’t water your lawn” restrictions, but anyone who knows the city knows you can’t tell the people what they can and cannot do.
One night, Sal and I tried this new bar that overlooked the river. The night started like always. We would walk in and order the most expensive drink in the house. If we were lucky, and the bartender cute, we would get it for free. Place a bet or two, make our cash, then bounce. Unfortuneately the (male) bartender served us our drinks full price. Like most establishments in the city, there was a television that constantly had the game on. Tonight was no different apparently because we were getting our fill of the Yankees. I couldn’t care less, I was a Met fan myself. It wasn’t the fourth inning when it was interrupted:
THE FOLLOWING IS A SPECIAL REPORT FROM CHANNEL 9 NEWS
“Ah c’com, who gives a rat’s ass,” said the large, very drunk man to my right.
BREAKING NEWS TONIGHT AS POLICE ARE RESPONDING TO A BIZARRE HOMOCIDE. THE SCENE OF THIS HORRIFIC EVENT TOOK PLACE IN BROOKLYN, WHERE THE BODY OF A WOMAN WAS FOUND IN A DUMPSTER BEHIND A STRIP MALL ON ERKSINE STREET. PRELIMINARY REPORTS HAVE THE WOMAN BEING ONE KAREN DOWD, ORIGINIALLY FROM LAS VEGAS, NEVADA BUT ATTENDING DOUBLEDAY UNVIERSITY HERE IN THE CITY. SHE WAS 22. WE’LL HAVE MORE ON THIS STORY AS IT DEVELOPS. WE NOW RETURN YOU…
There wasn’t a doubt in my mind about who that could be. They practically spelled it out. Karen. My Karen is dead.
I have to go over there,” I shouted to Sal who was on my left.
“Go where?”
“Were you not watching the TV? She’s dead”
“Look,” he said. “I understand that she was your girl, but you haven’t seen her in months. In any case, you just can’t walk down there; the area is covered with cops, it being a crime scene and all,” he remarked while taking a swig of his concoction.
“If you don’t want to help, fine. But the last thing I am going to do is sit around here.”
I got up off the stool. As I was leaving, I heard:
“Hey man, we didn’t even do our thing tonight.”

 

Ironheart (Part 2)

I took what seemed to be the longest train ride to the location given by the news. By the time I had got there, a lot of the fanfare had died down thankfully, but there was still a cop car, two officers, and a barricaded area. I approached the scene but was stopped by an officer. A tall man, his features chisled from stone.

“This is a crime scene,” the officer barked. “I am going to have to ask you to step back.”
“Excuse me officer,” I pleaded. I was going for the pity route. “I heard what happened on the news and recognized the victim as a friend of mine.”

“He asked you to step away from the scene.” Another officer, this one female, had stepped out of the police cruiser. She was plain from top to bottom. Rather be that way than chiseled I guess.
“Sorry,” I said. “I don’t think I can do that.”

With a thrust of my arm I sent the male officer sailing into the air, colliding with a parked cruiser. The female officer drew her gun and began to charge with great speed. With a state, she raised off the ground. I had her hanging there for a moment, just enough time for her to make sense of her surroundings. With a quick glance to my left, she followed, hitting the pavement with the sound of skinned flesh some forty yards away.
By this time the street lights had come on. It was dusk. I made my way to the section that was tapered off with police caution tape. On the floor around the dumpster, laid four cups, each containing evidence which hadn’t been catalogued. My guess is that the two cops were babysitting until real experts arrived. There were bullet casings under two of the cups, a strand of Karen’s hair in the third, and a matchbook in the fourth. There was no sign of the body, she obviously had been moved to a hospital. After my initial survey, I knocked over the cup containing the matchbook. Small, it fit in the palm of my hand. On the backside was a picture of a woman’s silhouette the words “Golden Ray” written underneath it.
“Golden Ray,” I said to myself. “Chinatown”.

My first step seems to be a gimmie. But if I figured it out, I’m sure the police did too so the quicker I get to the bottom of this the better. A quick look around was all the confirmation I needed as the sun had completely sunk below the horizon. With it being dark, it would be less likely that anyone would see me fly. With a running start, I took to the sky.

I landed in Chinatown out of the night sky. I wasn’t sure what the Golden Ray was but I hoped it was a restaurant; I hadn’t had anything to eat all day. Fifteen minutes of walking aimlessly looking up at the signs proved fruitless. Then I came across a sign to an underground establishment: The Golden Ray.
“Well, that’s too small for a restaurant,” I thought.
I made my way downstairs and was hit with the awful odor of booze, cigars, marijuana and sex. I think I’ve just found the shadiest strip joint the city, a dubious honor if I ever heard one. I bet even Sal has never heard of this place. Finding someone to ask would be a challenge. I don’t believe the people here are the most talkative.

I was soon at the back of the “club: where I came across a VIP door. With no hesitation, I opened it. Whoever this important person was, he or she might know what exactly goes on in a place like this besides the obvious. Upon settling foot I was met with a shout.
“A whoa whoa whoa, who the hell are you?” A middle-aged man wearing a light colored suit sat on a leather couch, flanked by two women who would be naked, if they weren’t wearing a string between their legs. The blue lights in the room overhead were a sharp contrast to the blood tinged color of the other rooms.
“My name is…”

“You know what?” The man in the suit said, “I don’t care who you are. It’s more important that you know who I am. I am the sole proprietor of this fine establishment. The name is Dan; you should remember that. If you want a lap dance or something, I’m pretty sure a couple of the girls on the floor would be willing to assist you, but these are my personal stash.”

“I’m not here for a lap dance. One of my good friends was murdered and stashed in a dumpster behind an electronics store across the bridge. You know anything about that?”

“I’m sorry kid,” Dan said. “I know a lot of people, you are going to have to elaborate.”
“Her name was Karen Dowd.”
“Who?” he asked. “Oh wait a minute. Bubbles? She’s dead? Look man, I didn’t have anything to do with that.”
“Bubbles?”
“Oh yeah, yeah, yeah,” Dan said. “She was one of my best girls. She had a habit of making her clients come back for more. I scooped her at the local college a couple of months ago and she was making us both a serious load of money. She’s really dead, huh? Well, serves her right for leaving me.”
“Left you?” I asked.

“Yeah, man. A couple of weeks ago she had been seeing this regular. Some guy by the name of Mark. Mark Sherman. The guy was a total square, he couldn’t handle the woman Bubbles was, you know? Anyway, she wanted to get out the business because, get this, she fell in love with the guy. Me? I run a business, but I’m not a pimp. I don’t have that whole “you can’t leave me” vibe going on so I let her walk. I knew I would find someone better. Besides, she wasn’t good at all in the sack,” he said with a grin.
I lost it. I lunged at Dan from six feet away and give hum a punch right across his cheekbone. My hand, already throbbing, was cocked back and ready to give another. Meanwhile, the girl who had been sitting to his left bolted upright and ran to the security alarm that was on the wall. Within seconds the door busted open and four muscular men in all black had stepped in, blocking the door.
I leapt towards one of them and speared him to the ground. As quickly as I did, I rolled over and pushed the second one to the ceiling with my palm. That gave me the breathing room to get my bearing with the third. He tried a punch, but I caught his arm with both of mine. I twisted my vice as fast as I could until I heard a snap accompanied with a cry of agony. The fourth blindsided me with a double fisted blow, sending me to the ground with the likes of the other three. He stepped over me, attempting to repeat his performance. With my open palms, I slammed him into the wall by the door. Head first.
Surveying the damage, I knew I had overstayed my welcome. I left the room and ran past the red sea of “clients” until I reached the main entrance. I hopped the four stairs up onto the street was met with a blow to the head by a nightstick. Three officers jumped on my back and handcuffed my wrists together, while one in plain clothes looking on while sipping a cop of coffee.

I was on the long end of a cold, steel table. The cop who was enjoying his cup of java while I was getting my face bashed in switched his beverage of choice to water; as seen as the half empty glass on the table. He was in his mid forties and bald. Not that horseshoe bald, but that Kojak bald. Only thing he was missing was the lollipop.

“Joe Saxon,” he said. “Based on your file it seems to me that you are one of the good citizens. Or at least were. Tonight, you are going to be charged with battery, property damage, assaulting two police officers, destruction of city proper for that stunt you pulled with our police vehicles, and tampering with a crime scene.”
“Look officer,” I pleaded.
“Detective.”
“Detective. I didn’t…”
“Detective Fast.”
“Okay, okay. Look, Detective Fast, I’m not some street criminal. Tonight, I was just looking for answers.”
“Mr. Saxon,” he snorted. Please realize that the New York Police Department hires professionals, and that vigilantes need not apply.”
“If you guys were so professional, you would have the case solved by now, wouldn’t you.”
“Not if we keep on having to deal with diversions like yourself.”
Touche.

“Now,” he continued. “I know why you went to The Golden Ray. Obviously you must have seen the matchbook at the crime scene. Now Mr. Saxon, what I do not understand is how you got there so fast, or even had the man power to dispatch two of our own to get to the scene in the first place. So tell me, are you working alone, or are we dealing with a group situation.”
“I’m alone.”
“Then how…”
“This maybe hard to believe,” I whispered. “But, I have these powers.”
Fast’s head perked up like a puppy would for a rib eye. He didn’t know whether to laugh in my face, slap me for being a smartass, or call the guys in the white jackets to take me away. Believe me or not, my “secret” wasn’t a secret anymore.

“Oh?” he asked.
“I know this sounds crazy but I have the power to move things with only my thoughts. Anything. Boxes, trees, four bouncers at a club, myself…”
“Yourself?” Fast asked.
“Yes,” I said with a sigh. “After I figured out The Golden Ray had something to do with this, I flew––well more accurately moved myself––to Chinatown. You can believe me or not.”
“I choose the latter,” he chortled. “Tell me this magic man. If you can do all of these things you say. If you could dispatch two officers and take out four individuals of good physical stature without breaking a sweat, how in fact did we haul you in?”
“That’s just the thing,” I said. “Sometimes I get tired. Lack of sleep, repeated use, whatever the reason I don’t know. But there comes a time where I hit empty. Times where I can’t even lift a finger. Times where all I get is a headache for my efforts.”
“You know what, I am tired of all of this,” said the man with the badge. He turned to a uniformed guard that was standing beside him. “Lock his ass up. I’m too old for this nonsense.”
Three hours had passed with me in this holding cell with a couple of others. I didn’t know them, and they didn’t know me but we all knew we were guilty of something whether we wanted to admit it or not. For a moment, I asked myself why was I even in this position. I knocked out a half dozen people and for what? A girl that one day decided I wasn’t good enough for her. But if I wasn’t good enough for her, who was? That club owner, Dan? Her “new friend” Mark? No, something wasn’t right.
An officer walked to the cage with a clipboard.
“Saxon comma Joe,” He shouted.

“Yeah,” I said as I jumped off my bench.
“You’ve got bail,” he chuckled to himself. “You are free to go.”
Good news. It’s possible that Sal got worried about me. He got all the money he kept in that sock next to his porn magazines to spring me out. Man, that is what friends are for. My glee turned to surprise however when I realized that it wasn’t Sal that bailed me out.
“Irons, what are you doing here?”
“What does it look like I am doing,” he snapped. “Come we have much to discuss and police precincts make me nervous.”
We soon were in a diner some blocks away from the police precinct. Wearing a cap and a pair of shades Irons gave to me, I tried my best to blend in. I was tired. Save a couple of minutes here and there I hadn’t slept in a day, I now have a police record, and the trail to Karen’s killer is getting colder by the minute.
“Ahh, how long as it been?” Irons said with his mouth full of pie
“Three months. Since the end of the semester.”
“It’s amazing how fast time goes, here today gone tomorrow boy I tell you,” he said. “Have you graduated yet?”
“No, not yet. I still have another year to go.”
“Then what?”
“What do you mean then what?” I admit it, I was cranky. “A year of school, then I graduate. What comes next, I don’t know,” I said as I sipped my coffee.
“Really? No plan, no direction?”
“What are you getting at, Irons?”
“Well, to make a short story even shorter,” he said. He reached into his pocket and pulled a clipping from that day’s newspaper, The Light. The Light wasn’t more of a paper as it was a gossip column surrounded by sixty pages of fish wrap. The clipping read.
JEALOUS EX-BOYFRIEND ARRESTED. COULD THIS BE THE KILLER?
“How did they…”
“It gets better,” Irons said. “News travels fast in this town you better believe it.”
He began to read from the paper.
“’Sources at a local adult-themed bar claim that one Joe Saxon, one ex-boyfriend of the deceased Karen Dowd injured four men in the bar last night, a bar that once employed the deceased. One of the injured men claimed that Scott used his mind to send him in the air like it was nothing. Scott was picked up by local authorities shortly thereafter and may have been charged with the shooting death of Dowd in a form of a rampage as reported by our late edition.’”
“That’s bull,” I said. “I wasn’t charged with that. Trust me, I was charged with a lot of stuff but murder wasn’t a part of it.”
“You’re already guilty in the court of public opinion,” he said. “They might as well lock you up and throw away the key now. But that is not what concerns me. You used your abilities to hurt other people.”
“It’s a long story. All you need to know is that I was trying to find out would kill Karen and those men got in my way,” I said.
“You do realize that you are bit of an urban legend now,” he said. “Everyone wants to catch a glimpse of the mysterious Mind Man. You know that, right?”
“Well,” I said. “Ideally, I wanted to keep this whole thing secret, but it didn’t work out that way. What are you going to do?”
“That’s the million dollar question,” he said. “That is something you are going to have to figure out. But the reason I want to talk to you today isn’t about your new found fame. I need you to listen to me carefully because I don’t know how else to say this. You were not the first person that I came across that has these abilities.”
Another one of my world famous blank stares.
“Two months ago, I was in town doing my act when I asked a young man to come on stage. I put him under, and after a few games here and there, it was time for the showstopper.”
“Don’t tell me you asked him to fly.”
“Worse,” he said. I asked him to lift a bolted table out in the audience knowing full well he couldn’t do it. After all, up until this point you were the only anomaly. But not only did he lift a table, he raised every table, chair, and person with relative ease.”
“Interesting story,” I said. “Even though I appreciate you springing me out and paying for breakfast, I have more pressing issues to attend to.
“I trained him,” Irons said, ignoring me. “I trained him just like you to free the dormant parts of his mind. He turned his thoughts into powers of physical strength. He had potential. We he didn’t have was control. One night some two weeks ago, he overpowered me, and I haven’t heard from him since. I guess what I am trying to say is that I need your help. You are the only person I know that can bring him back to me.”
“Is this the reason you bailed me out of jail?”
“After reading about how you handled yourself against those guys at the club, I realized that you could do great things with your gifts and the right motivation.”
I was being commissioned as some sort of a second rate hit man, taking out people who were just like me. Meanwhile, Karen dies in vain throughout this whole mess. I could have looked him in the eye and told him to shove it. But I would be no better than that other guy and above all else he did save me from those iron bars some blocks away.
“What’s this guy’s name?”
“He lives down in the Spring Creek Towers in Brooklyn. More specifically in the Kempton Loop. His name is Mark Sherman.
The missing link. Just like that I was back on the trail where I had left off. I didn’t tell Irons I had the name back in Chinatown. The pieces were falling together. This guy who was different like myself gets involved with Karen. But there of course, there were some pieces missing. I knew they weren’t going to be missing for long.
I waited for sunset where the skies turned the colors of cotton candy. I flew from my neighborhood to Spring Creek Towers. I dressed as conservatively as I could: Dark jeans, a black T-shirt, and some sneakers so I wouldn’t call any extra attention to myself. I ended up landing on a basketball court adjacent to the Kempton Loop. The apartment buildings (the actual towers) were stories upon stories tall. There would be no way I would find this guy. It was the proverbial needle in the haystack.
I was knocked to the ground by a quick shove. I guess the needle found me.
“Took you long enough,” the voice said.
He was at least ten years older than myself. He wore denim shorts with a black tank top. He obviously had the same idea I had. I wasn’t sure if he was showing his physique or trying to keep cool but he should have been glad I wasn’t he fashion police.
“So you are the one they call Joe Saxon,” he said. “I thought you were a myth, just a figment of the hypnotist’s imagination. I thought I was alone. I thought I was the only mentally enhanced human on the planet. I was wrong.”

The ogre stuck his hands into the blacktop like it was putty. He molded it, forming an edge with his bare hands. He lifted the edge above his chest. The raised asphalt curled with tremendous speed away from him like an ocean wave. Towards me. Seeing the mound would make a normal person’s life flash before their eyes. Against my better judgment to stop the damned thing, I rolled out of the way, avoiding injury in the process.
“The hypnotist told me that he came across someone just like me who had natural ability. Of course, I didn’t believe him. I repeatedly begged the man if I could see the other man with the gifts I had,” he said stepping towards me at a snails pace. “He repeatedly refused, saying it wasn’t ‘the right time’. One night, I just had it and went on my own looking for you. Getting information about you was fairly easy. Finding out what were your dreams, your fears, the people you loved was pure sport. You can thank your friend Sal for that one. He’s got loose lips when he’s on the bottle.”

Great. I am going to die because Sal was a lightweight. I stood myself up, and braced myself for whatever Sherman decided to throw at me.
“Well you got me,” I said looking for a way to stall. “No one had to die to get me here, but you got me anyway. What do you want?”
“I think it’s obvious what I want,” he said. “Tonight, we are going to see who is the better enhanced. One of us is not going to make it tonight.”
He charged at me like a rhino. We crashed into a mound of pavement created by his last feat. Now I knew how those bouncers at the club felt. As I laid there writhing in pain I asked myself why I wasn’t blessed with invulnerability or super healing. The ogre towered over me, smiling.
“I wasn’t going to kill her you know,” he said. “I was only going to rough her up, you know? She fought back, or at least tried to. She took out her pistol and tried shooting at me. I figure it would be an ironic reminder that one shouldn’t try to be a hero. Now it’s your turn.”

With my outstretched palm, I summoned the metal backboard from the hoop from the far side of the court. With a jerk of my wrist, the board sailed through the air, connecting with the skull of the ogre.
A searing pain began to radiating throughout my head. My temples began throbbing excessively. My mind was on empty. Over twenty four hours and lack of a proper rest put this situation from bad to worse.
I stood up but the change in the elevation only made the headache worse. At that point I would have carved a hole into my skull if it would make it feel better. With both my hands on my temples and no power to speak of, I was an easy target for another charge from the beast. This time we crashed through the chain link fence that was enclosing the court and spilled onto the sidewalk. By this time a good crowd had gathered, urging us on as if we were Roman gladitators.
“Your pathetic,” he said. “And to think I actually feared that you may have been better than me. You are nothing but a joke.”

He knelt down and put his massive hands around my neck and squeezed. Hard.
“I don’t even need my abilities to finish you off,” he taunted.
With every second, his grip got tighter and tighter. This is where I am going to die. What a night of entertainment this would be for the ever growing crowd. I suppose I will see Karen again. She did die in vain. She died at the hands of a guy who wanted to have a high-mental pissing contest. A contest he was winning, hands down. This wasn’t fair. I refuse to let some pansy who didn’t even give me a fair shot to begin with rub me out.

With my left index finer, I motioned for a large black Sport Utility Vechicle that was parked on the side of the road to be raised. It didn’t budge. My headache worsened with every second. I tried the SUV again, this time with better results. The vehicle hovered over the middle of the road some eight feet above the ground. Blood began to ooze out of my ears.

The vehicle was suspended in the air, and my attention focused to Mark Sherman, the ogre. With one stare of my eyes, he was dragged into the street, leaving me in a heap still on the sidewalk. With a deep blink, I let the SUV go, sending it crashing onto the body of the ogre and denting the road beneath. The impact snapped Sherman’s body in half. The last thing I heard before passing out were the sounds of disbelief from the “spectators” and of police sirens.

I awoke some three days later. Sal was took my left, and Detective Fast to my right.
“How do you feel,” Sam asked.
“I feel like someone should stop drinking.”
“Oh, so you heard about that,” Sal said. “Sorry about that. Yeah, won’t happen again.”
“It’s cool,” I offered.
“Mr. Saxon,” the booming voice of Fast barked. “I would like to take this opportunity to tell you that one Kenneth Irons will not be making more people float, for lack of a better again, anytime soon.”
“Should I be more surprised you took Irons off the street or the fact you believe what he had done,” I said. “Did you arrest him?”
“Think of it more as indefinite protective custody,” Fast said.
“Will I being going away to protective custody too?” I asked. After all, Mark Sherman…”
“Yes, Mark Sherman,” Fast said. “Poor guy was hit by a car while jaywalking. It is sad to see him go.”
“Excuse me? I’m pretty sure there was at least a dozen people that saw otherwise”
“Sure,” he said. It was the guy that moves things with his mind. Mr. Saxon, consider your record expunged. Who knows, if you keep your nose clean we might work with you in the future. Now, get some rest, and we’ll talk when you’re discharged.”
Working to help curb crime in the city, if only Karen could see me now.

THE END.

Holiday Short Story!

Originally written for the 2010 Holiday Season:

 

For The City Man Who Has Everything

It was a little after ten in the evening when I surfaced from the subway station. The night air was cold and crisp, and ever so often the wind would rip through my pea-coat and knit cap. I walked briskly, as my feet were killing me in my dress shoes and I couldn’t wait to get home to get out of them. Home was more than a destination; it was more like a haven of an apartment filled with central heating and cups of my favorite brand of cider.

As usual with Christmas Eve in the city, festive multi-colored lights hung from nearly every shop window and street corner. Wreaths were wrapped around streetlights with ribbon, and procrastinators shuttled in and out of the remaining open stores at a breakneck pace. I always found this amusing. The day after Thanksgiving and the night before Christmas were logistical nightmares. The time between? Not so much. I actually finished all my Christmas shopping in October after receiving an unexpected bonus from the law firm I sold my soul for. By now my gifts had all been practically been given out. That is, all except for one. It was a platinum bracelet, studded with diamonds and emeralds, that sat on a side table next to my black leather couch wrapped up and tied with a bow.

I crossed Houston street and bought a small packet of roasted chestnuts from a street vendor. Not that I particularly liked the taste of chestnuts but they were an excellent way for me to keep my hands warm in my coat in lieu of having my gloves with me. The vendor and I exchanged pleasantries about the holiday. He told me about being anxious to get home to share his newborn daughter’s first Christmas with his wife. I most likely bored him with my story of my planned proposal to my girlfriend Stacie with my Christmas gift bracelet.

“No ring, huh?” He cackled.
“I don’t do normal,” I said.

The wind had started to pick up, so I bundled up and hunched over as I jogged on over to my apartment building. I slid the doorman a gift-card to a department store, walked the short red-ribbon and marble clad hallway and stepped into the elevator. My favorite holiday tune sung its muffled melody from the elevator speaker as I made my way up to my floor. I couldn’t help whistling along.

When the doors opened, I fiddled for my keys while keeping my eyes fixated on the sole window that sat on the edge of the hallway that overlooked the city skyline. It wasn’t going to be a white Christmas but it was good enough for me. I headed to my door but slowed when I realized the door was left ajar.

I never left my door open and so my heart began to race. What could be on the other end? My irritable landlord? Robbers? My girlfriend’s parents? Oh how I hoped for the first two. I pushed the door open to find Stacie herself, sitting alone on the couch. I thought against mentioning she left the door open, and when we embraced she smelled of the winter cold so I knew she hadn’t been there long. She had used her key to get in because she wanted to surprise me. And surprise me she did. I offered her a glass of cider, flicked on the stereo, and sat next to her on the couch.

“So what brings you here this time of night?” I asked.

She turned to me and put her hand on my lap.

“Do you love me?” she asked.
“I do,” I said.
“Okay then,” she said. “I want you to know that I love you too.”

I frowned. Was she breaking up with me?

“Okay,” I said.

She slid off the couch and got on her knees. She dug a box out of her pants pocket with a diamond ring inside.

“Will you marry me, then?” she asked. A tear forming in her eye.

She beat me to the punch by a nightfall. She was gorgeous but shrewd.

“No,” I said. “I can’t marry you because you were supposed to be marrying me.”

I reached over to the side table that held the small gift-box and handed it to her. She unwrapped it, and when she laid eyes on the bracelet her eyes lit up.

“It’s beautiful,” she said, putting it on her wrist. “But I have a ring and the rules state that a proposal only counts with a ring.”

“Says who? I…”

“Just say you’ll marry me, fool,” she smirked.

“Then my answer is yes,” I conceded.

I guess I was right when I said that I didn’t do normal. Her and I watched the city skyline from the window opposite the living room. Out in the distance into the night sky, I could see a few snowflakes glide their way to the ground.

THE END.

Happy Holidays, yo!
–Flobo

Novels or Shorts?

Novels or Shorts
Whattup peoples? This of course is yet another post in the Flobito.com Presents series where we (and I mean “we” in the royal sense a la We are not amused) talk about how to better your eventual writing projects whether it be a screenplay, or a memoir, or in today’s case a novel/short story. Of course, if you haven’t read the other posts in the series check them out by CLICKING HERE)

Cool? Now, let me slip in to something a bit more… ahem…comfortable.

I am relatively new to the writing game. Sure, I’ve written hundreds of stories growing up like most kids, but I only really started taking the craft seriously five years ago. That said, I’ve learned so much it would be a crime not to share. (Check out some of my older works here.) When I get an idea (Man, I should do a post about the crazy ways I get inspiration while I’m at it) I usually decide whether or not I should gun for a novel, or instead make it into a short story.

Short Stories
Short stories (about 50,000 words or less–and this includes novellas, novelettes, and flash fiction) is definitely a valid way to go with some stories. It allows the author to focus on character and plot, and details tend to take a back seat. Now this isn’t at all a bad thing. Sometimes as an author you build a world from scratch, and other times you use existing worlds to make your own. If I’m writing a short story about a kid who misses the early morning bus to school, it does me no favors to describe the bus’ engine is agonizing detail.

In my experience, unless otherwise asked, short stories are the perfect writing sample for when you want to show others your writing style. In sometimes in as short as 1,000 words (flash fiction), you can draw on your character’s drive, “voice”, as well as show your ability to tell a story.

There are drawbacks however. Short stories (even as a collection) are harder to sell. Not saying you should just be writing for the money, but I’m assuming you at least want people to read your work when you are finished. There are short story collections, but compared to novels they hardly get the same amount of shelf space at the bookstore unless it’s a collection from an already established author (Stephen King and Elmore Leonard come to mind).

Also artistically, you run the risk of leaving your customers with an “unsatisfying” conclusion. Now, satisfaction is personal, but deciding where to end a short story is crucial. I liken it to double dutch jump rope. You jump on, do your thing, and have to jump off without hitting the ropes, sort to speak.

Novels

Novels on the other hand (at least 50,000 words but usually around 70,000) are longer pieces of work. You can go in depth with your characters and plot, but you have the bonus space to go into themes and details. If you want to establish a character’s life as boring before becoming amazing when his dog turns into a superhero, you could spend literal pages about the main character’s preference for oatmeal for breakfast, dates with his stamp collection, or his love of just staring into a wall at hours on end. Sure you have to move your work along with the plot, but you can paint a more detailed picture of the world, and that is key.

Usually when you get representation, your agent would usually ask for a long form sample. This is to determine whether or not you have the literary “stamina” to write a 150-300 page manuscript while maintaining the integrity of your characters and the story you put them in.Because of the length, the prospect of writing a novel can be difficult. An idea you thought could go three hundred pages or even a series of books could just as easily run out of steam on page seventy-five. There you have a choice: Press on, clip some ideas into a short story, or trash the story all together.

This guy ends up doing a lot of the third. Sorry, I’m a tortured artist that way…lol

Choose wisely.

Hey-yo, I hope this helps on your writing journey. It’s November so you know what that means? NaNoWriMo. It’s my second go, wish me luck.

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–Flobo

The Origin Story

The Origin Story

Okay peoples. Say you got the next great novel (or “novel franchise” if you’re doing the Harry Potter thing) idea in your head. It’s going to be about a guy (or gal) who overcomes adversity to defeat the villain in the end, but this time it’s going to be UNIQUE! There’s going to be action, comedy, drama, thrills, chills, and spills and it’s going to be amazing! During my film school days a writer (or writer-director) would pour his heart out to the class, describing his kick-ass idea for a movie. You could tell he was already into the project by his inflection and posture. Then came the death-knell: One film student, who was usually slouching the back, would lazily raise his hand and ask:

“Who IS this character?”

BAM! The gravy train would instantly derail. Was this student asking about the existential properties of a human being and what makes them tick? Heck NO, nobody at film school was ever that deep. No, they really wanted some general background on the character. They wanted to know the character’s Origin

Origin stories aren’t just for superheroes (but them too). They allow the audience to learn about a character and find out what he’s made of. For the audience it’s a character’s origin story that determines whether or not the character in question is LIKEABLE and RELATEABLE. These two building blocks are imperative to the success to your story. For example, imagine the plot of a movie is the following:

“A person with everything to lose puts it all on the line for a footrace up Deadman’s Cavern.”

Boom! There’s your synopsis (log-line). But watch how the tone of the movie changes when we throw in the origin of our hero:

A. Dax Rodrigo was one of the best USAF fighter pilots on record, until being gunned down during a mission left him without the use of his legs. After being told he would never walk again, training and perseverance proved the doctors wrong. Now, to prove to HIMSELF that he was as strong as he ever was, he signs up for the Deadman Cavern’s footrace.

B. Stacey Billings is just your average girl and that’s the problem. Stacey has tried everything to stick out but to no results. After hearing about a footrace at Deadman’s Cavern and how most people don’t even finish, she joins the race. Not only to prove that girls can do it better, but also to win the heart of her high school sweetheart.

C. Jack St. John just invented a BRAND NEW jetpack that’s going to revolutionize personal travel. The problem is, he’s a little short on cash. After hearing about a footrace that has a grand prize of two million dollars for coming in first, it’s up to him and his sidekick Bobby to see if they have any hopes of winning.

You may have noticed that origin stories to have some tinges of plot within them and that’s okay. Stories A B and C are all about the same race. But more importantly, they have three different or tones or “flavors” about them. A is more of the traditional “sports story” narrative, where our hero digs deep in order to play in “The Big Game”. B is more of a romantic comedy narative, in which someone looks within themselves to show they have something “to offer” the opposite sex and this gets projected by two external things: The race as the challenge and The Sweetheart as the object of desire. C takes a Sci-Fi but yet pragmatic approach. Sure he’s building a jetpack, but we all can RELATE to making money..

That is unless you’re against the stuff. If you are, you can give it to me and….

Well, you get the idea.

This is why superhero stories are so engrained in our culture. There are dozens of heroes that share the same powers, but it’s usually the character’s origin (and personality traits) that separate them. Again it’s all about your audience relating to your character. Let’s take Superman for an example. Sure fans (and fanboys) are going to nitpick this but most people know the basic story of Superman: (Duh, American Superheroes are our Classical Greek Myths but I digress)

Superman is from the planet Krypton. When the planet was blowing the hell up, Supes was placed on a spaceship for safety. He lands in rural Kansas (Smallville) where he’s raised by surrogate Earth parents. He hones his powers and in thirty years time he’s the Man of Steel.

Lots of people gravitate to Superman for a lot of reasons. (Side note: Supes isn’t my favorite but I don’t hate on him as much as the modern comic fan). First you have the “American Dream” dynamic. There are some that latch on the fact Superman came from another world (or country) and worked his way up being America’s number one guy. There are other people that gravitate to the fact that Supes had foster parents and even with them, still achieved in life. These two are splinters of the “fish out of water” dynamic. Almost everyone at one time, whether it be work or school or a stripclub (kidding!) felt as if they didn’t belong there. Even still, some would appreciate the fact that Supes is simply a superhero, somebody that the people of Metropolis look up to.

But your heroes don’t have to be super powered, unless you want them to. Now, your character doesn’t have to appeal to everybody (For one it’s near impossible to do, and for another you risk destroying your Character Integrity ), but it’s up to you to find out what is going to make your audience pay money to see the exploits of the character you develop.

If you are creating characters for the screen or stage, origin stories (even if they aren’t on the page) help your performers internalize the character. Here’s one more example.

I work as a backstage interviewer for Mach One Pro Wrestling; I’ve talked about that many times. When I started, I didn’t have an origin story or character. I was just told to be “myself”. Now ironically, since I use my given name at Mach One (a name no one has ever referred to me save for legal documents since 1996)
I felt a disconnect. I couldn’t be myself while using that name, because it wasn’t me. So I devised a back story or origin to make the transition from Flobo the cool guy, to the Uptight Nerdy Interviewer just that smoother. Wanna hear it?

As the son of a rich investor, my goal is to buy Mach One right from under the guys who own the company. So when I interview the talent and staff, I’m gathering information for my eventual takeover

Now does this show up on screen? No, but having that origin helps me make decisions as far as my posturing, line of questioning, and my antics when holding the microphone. I use my self-devised origin as a FOUNDATION for every interview I conduct.

Okay, I’ve rambled enough. Go out and create the greatest characters ever. Ones with killer origin stories, will ya?

–Flobo

Pick Your Genre

Pick Your Genre

Okay, so you’re sitting at home watching a cheap movie you got from a Redbox or a discount Wal-Mart bin. Your stomach churns because the flick you’re laying your eyes on is simply horrible. The story is so second rate, you say. You tell yourself “I can do better than this, are you kidding me?” (Sidenote, if you’ve NEVER thought that, than maybe this article isn’t for you.)

So you decide to try your hand at writing a script (or create the source material in general), and you have some ideas, but you just aren’t sure what avenue to take your story in. Well, one of the first things you got to think of is deciding what genre your new “bomb-ass screenplay to the extreme” is going to fall into.

Of course generally speaking, the two major genres are comedy and drama. I’m not telling you anything new here. You should also know that all stories are essentially drama, and the execution of the premise/story/plot determines whether or not it’s a drama or comedy. I’ve used this analogy before, but we are all conceived female, for example. (True Story. It’s the reason why men have nipples). Later on in our prenatal development we are assigned a gender and we come out of the womb either male or female. But if you’ve ever scrolled down the aisle of a Best Buy or Target (or Blockbuster, if you’re old school) you know there are way more genres than just the aforementioned two. You have romantic-comedies, you have action-adventures, you have westerns and war. You also got science-fiction, fantasy, thrillers and mysteries. The possibilities are endless.

Most aspiring career writers, usually somebody who either gets contracted to write something or someone looking to make writing a career, tend to write according to popular trends. The process is pretty simple: Basically find something that’s in the zeitgeist and craft your story around that. The problem with this method is kind of obvious. If it’s in the zeitgeist, (or the pop culture fabric if you will) a lot of people are going to have the same idea. It’s sort of like going to a baseball game. If the team you came to root for is down by seven runs in the eighth inning, I can imagine thousands of people having the same idea of leaving the game early to “beat the traffic”. And of course as the cruel irony of mother earth would have it, you’re stuck in a traffic jam even before your sorry team even leaves the field.

If that’s too theoretical, imagine this: From the year 1998 to about 2009 the whole world was smitten with vampires (again). You had your “Blades” all the way up to your “True Bloods”, “Twilights”, and “Moonlights”. Now, of course we as the American public has been engrossed in vampires before, “Bram Stoker’s Interview with the Vampire,” “My Best Friend is a Vampire” and “Near Dark” come to mind, but never before have we tried tinkering with the mythos with vampires so much. It was close semblance to the Western genre. Westerns were one of the last “pure genres” in that you knew who the good guys were and who the bad guys were. It was as American as a slice of apple pie. The Spaghetti Western and Revisionist Western movements came and changed all that. Now every Western that graced the screen since are riddled with anti-heroes with ambiguous moral compasses, living in a world that can be easily called “less than desirable”. A far cry from the romanticized view we had of the Old West in the 1950s (film) or the 1930s (comics).

A more immediate problem happens when two different works have a similar story/plot or themes. This happens more in Hollywood than anywhere else, but who could forget movies that come out within months of each other having a similar story? (Think “Armageddon”/”Deep Impact, or “Dante’s Peak”/”Volcano” or “Finding Nemo”/”Shark Tale”).

I know this this is totally off topic but I am “Shark Tale” fan myself.

The second method, or the more “idealized” method is to write what you know, or what you are more comfortable with. You lived in an inner city where crime was part of the daily life? Maybe your crime story would be a stronger entry than the one written by the upper middle class film school graduate (zing!). You say your doctoral thesis was in underwater exploration for rare jewels? Well then, your great American Novel would feature a character that does exactly that (wiki: Dirk Pitt). This is a safer method in a way because you are more familiar with the genre’s conventions (or “rules” the genre plays by) but it leads itself to some problems. One, it’s very easy to stray off course. What I mean by that is, if you were the guy with the doctorate in that exploration mumbo jumbo, it’s very easy to have a character or a plot point be bogged down with needless information or exposition. “The Da Vinci Code” was a prime example of this. There are entire chapters where the action stops and the characters drop information to each other. Then again, it’s a best selling book so what do I know? Another problem is that of your audience. There are very few authors out there that create just for themselves, the crazies. You eventually are going to have to have an audience to at least make your work relevant if not profitable. You can know all there is to know about red beans, but your action thriller about trying to genetically engineer black beans into red ones can fall on deaf ears if your audience just doesn’t care.

This is a problem that affects Sci-Fi. A science fiction writer wants to create a certain world but the movie execs feel that children under 18 and women (the people who spend the most at the movies) aren’t going to dig it. So what happens in the land of show business? That’s right, creative compromise. I’m singling out Hollywood here but it happens everywhere. Now, your space tale about a guy trying to leave his home planet to be become an intergalactic bounty hunter has a lightspeed spaceship chase and a romantic subplot to maximize potential viewers.

Oh, and I’m not going to stand on a soapbox and claim “creativity is dead”. Ever since the world has had artists, they have been starving and are usually forced to create things against their natural will for their clients. It’s an evil of the profession.

Or to paraphrase the old saying, “It ain’t called show art, it’s show business.”

There is a balance between the two methods. Find something that is needed in the marketplace, but don’t jump into a segment that is over saturated. This also holds true for non-fiction too. For a time period in the 1990s during President Clinton’s…er…extra-circular activities, there were books coming about him regularly. Things were going good—new authors came to the forefront, fading authors got some extra shine–but then came the backlash. The American people were ready to move on and you soon found books in the subgenre filling out discount bins at the local Kmart.

And you and I both know that nobody goes to K-mart.

Happy Writings, yo!

–Flobo

Heroes and Villains

Heroes And Villains

It’s been said that “Without Judas, there would be no Jesus.” Now sparing you a religious/ethical debate, partly because I am ignorant in both, the world’s greatest and timeless stories are derived by a hero (including his/her ideals) or “Protagonist”, versus a villain (and his/her ideals) or “Antagonist”.

Of course who is the hero or the villain comes down to perception and point of view. For example, let’s imagine I’m spilling my guts about my ex-girlfriend to you at a bar. I tell you that I came home from work to find my babycakes cheating on me. Well, in my version of the story, I’m the hero and my ex is the villain (due to her actions). Let’s say my ex-girlfriend is in the same bar the next day and is telling you (who apparently lives at this bar) her side of the story. She says that a census guy came to the house to conduct an interview and before he could ask a question I storm in the house, throw a tantrum, and leave. Is my ex-babycakes still the villain?

Perception.

Your hero is only as strong as his/her villain. It’s a twist on that whole “chain is only as strong as its weakest link” axiom. This time the chain is your screenplay or manuscript, and your characters (and plot points) are the links. One dimensional villains are a surefire way to undercut your entire piece in one fell swoop.

Evil heavyset guys wearing a cloak and top-hat twirling their mustaches went out with silent films. This is problem that affected films in the up until the 80s. Your mercenary hero (Like Stallone’s “Rambo”, or Schwarzenegger’s “Commando”) would be plopped in some exotic locale and they would lay waste to hundreds of extras on his way to their particular goal. Now, this still happens in films (See Liam Neeson’s “Taken”) but by the end of the 80s, people were becoming jaded. They wanted to see their heroes in danger. Now, the best way to do this is to strengthen your villain.

In the late 80s, heroes were getting hurt. This had a chain reaction effect, as screenwriters tried to rationalize why would someone who got dominated by the villain in first and second acts would continue on their quest while struggling to stay alive. This gave rise to what’s known as the Anti-hero. Now, Anti-hero characters have been around since the days of Greek theater. Hollywood, however really embraced the trait in mainstream films starting in the late 1980s. In fact, the original “Die Hard” film is seen as one of the vanguards for the phenomena.

If you haven’t seen the film, you should. Instead of being a guy who took down soldiers without breaking a sweat, “Die Hard”‘s John McClane…well, broke more than a sweat..

Anti-heroes are a littler harder to write because you as the author have to present your audience a good reason why the hero would forgo his status quo and partake in the story. Hack writers have done this many of times. The most cliched way works like this:

G-man: Jack Amazing, the government needs your help on this mission.
Jack: I told you, I’m retired.
G-man: I understand. But if you do this, your criminal record will be wiped clean.
Jack: *Growls* I’m in. But this is the last time… You know, unless there are sequels.

A guilty favorite of mine, “2Fast2Furious” works that plotline to a tee. Also check out “The Rundown”.

Many writers (understandably) regulate their villains to a plotpoint/or MacGuffin. You see, in a 120 page screenplay you are on average going to have the hero on screen for 75-85 of those pages. Just say Mr. X wants to take over to world and let the good guy get to work. No back-story? no problem!

Television cop dramas do this often. You see, an average hour-long cop drama TV show isn’t an hour at all. After commercials each episode runs about 39-44 minutes on average. A lot of times, these shows have to run on short-hand to move the story along. For example, if some girl dies of a drug overdose in act one and the cops have to interrogate the drug dealer to make him snitch on the drug lord, instead of giving the dealer a proper back story, a lot of times a minority is cast (wearing appropriate gang-related colors, bandannas or head-ties). This tells the audience “he’s bad news, just trust us”, so they can move on to the next dramatic beat. This doesn’t affect white actors as much. Usually if a white male (wearing modest middle class clothes) is brought into a interrogation, they are usually a victim of coercion from someone else or they have incredibly bad luck. The exception being pedophiles. For some reason pedophiles are almost always white guys on TV and…

….I’m getting off topic.

Anyway, the hardest character type to pull off in my humble opinion is the anti-villain. Arguably the newest archetype of the four, it’s someone who is the bad guy but usually against their will or someone who is doing heroic things but is still being perceived as the villain. Back to the cop show example, the Internal Affairs Bureau rep, (the officer responsible for making sure the other cops are working within the law) are usually hated by the other (non-internal affairs) cops for just doing their jobs. Forrest Whitaker’s character from “The Shield”, Jon Kavanaugh is a top notch example of this. Seriously *jumping on soapbox*

“The Shield” is one of the best works of fiction. Period.

*Off soapbox*

A more comical example: If I walk into Los Angeles wearing a black T-shirt with a crossed out marijuana leaf with the words “Illegalize It” written underneath it, any bet I would need a police escort home. Unless the police were in on it too. Can’t be too sure, they have nightsticks.

This November, It’s the National Novel Writing Competition month, aka NaNoWriMo. I’m taking a crack at it, and I hope the preceding has got you in the mood to try it yourself.

–Flobo

Character Integrity

Character Integrity

For a second imagine your favorite television show. You know, the one you’ve followed for seasons and (most likely) own a couple of the seasons on DVD/Blu-Ray. The comedy! The drama! The misadventures! Besides the plotlines, the thing that keeps you coming back is the interplay between the characters. Or in “Smallville’s” case, the second rate special effects, but I digress. That said, you remember that ONE episode that just fell flat? You know the one I’m talking about. It was if the writers had an “off day”. The jokes aren’t as funny, or the action didn’t quite match up in quality to the other episodes. Your favorite character did something that you just KNEW he/she wouldn’t do. It almost seems offensive that the television network would let such a thing slide, after obviously failing quality control and…

Okay, analogy over….

It’s been said that the difference between what is said and what is done is known as “Integrity”. If I tell you I’m the best baker this side of the Mississippi, but I have no idea what a cupcake is, my integrity takes a hit. If I say I hate kids, but then turn around and adopt an orphanage….you get the idea.

Fictional characters are no different. When the creator a character (ahem, that would be you) develops the characters traits, needs, wants, drives, desires, and moral compass, you more or less have to stick to them to make the character GENUINE. Can you challenge the character’s foundation? Of course, that’s where conflict comes from. However changing that foundation is certain death.

On the television show “24″ Kiefer Sutherland WAS Jack Bauer. Many episodes and directors later, Sutherland was still the guy who wore the bullet proof vest and pistol. He knew that character more than anybody. Legend has it that Sutherland (as an executive producer on the show) would challenge the writers whenever they came up with something that “Jack wouldn’t do”. Which I find hilarious, because Jack did damn near everything on that show. I guess some hack writer had a scene of Jack playing Nintendo Wii while munching on donuts.

A more nuanced example. On the 90s sitcom “Family Matters”, the character Steve Urkel was introduced as a nerdy date for the teen-aged Laura Winslow character. Steve was socially awkward and had a high pitched voice. The character tested so well that Urkel was added to the show. His transition was more gradual, but the show began to cater episodes around Steve. He went from being a nerd who couldn’t dance, had a silly car and loved cheese (all plausible), to a mad scientist that cloned himself, created a robot that became a member of the Chicago Police Department, and developed a teleportation device in his spare time. The character became a caricature, and audiences changed the channel in droves. In fact, the Steve Urkel character was responsible for the success AND the demise of the show he appeared on.

“Okay, okay oh wise sage of free literary and creative advice. How do I avoid cutting the legs off from underneath my character? How do I evade the urge to put my Rocky Balboa character in a dress?”

First of all, thank you for your kind words. Secondly, it’s easier than you think. I’m a firm believer in a character beat sheet. Like a dramatic beat sheet, a character beat sheet is where you write down EVERYTHING about a character. Measurements, birthdays, likes, dislikes,and backstory are just a few of the things that would go into a character beat sheet. When you decide to put your character in a new episode, make sure you READ the sheet again before you put pen to page.

“Why?” I can hear you say “I have got my character right here in my head, Flobo. Pssh, I’m not doing all that work.”

I say spend some extra time now so you will save time on a couple of rewrites later. Oh, and when it comes to creative ideas and the law, an idea in your head is as good as the piece of paper it’s written on. You can take that to the bank.

The last thing you want as a creator of a character is have your AUDIENCE look at you and say:

“She wouldn’t do that!”

Happy writing,

–Flobo

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